Caption Sequel! - Atonement, Part 2
Added 2020-01-17 00:36:54 +0000 UTCHello all!
Last month, the caption sequel poll was won by a SINGLE vote. That's nuts! So for this month I pledged to make a sequel for the "losing" caption.
And here it is! Atonement, Part 2!
I also included the original caption, which I wrote back in the elder days of 2014 (!) đ
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Joel stands outside the bedroom, taking a moment for himself. Herself? These days, he isnât sure which pronoun fits better.
Anatomically, of course, thereâs no question. Thanks to the surgery in Thailand before the wedding, he now meets Pastor Martinâs definition of womanhood. Joel isnât sure heâll ever get used to the new female genitals between his legs. The sensation is so strange! Itâs especially bad when he and Martin fuck. Well, âbadâ as in âgood.â Actually, âmind-blowingâ was more appropriate.
But he isnât supposed to enjoy getting screwed! Heâs a man, or at least heâs supposed to be. Right?
âAre you coming to bed, honey?â Pastor Martin calls. âIâm ready for you.â
âIn a second,â Joel says.
The truth is, despite everything, he enjoys his new role. He was a useless drunk who killed a woman because he didnât care about anyone or anything. Now heâs a pastorâs wife. He has a community, responsibilities to the congregation, and hopes for the future. Joel lost his masculinity, be he gained a new life.
But has he atoned? Not yet. Heâs not sure he ever will. He took a life. The only way to atone is to make a new one, and he canât anymore.
Yet.
Joel thrust out his slim belly. What would it be like to be pregnant? Uterine transplants are becoming more common. Maybe soon theyâll offer them to... people...? No, to women like her. Could she really be a mother? Why not. Sheâs already become so much more than she ever expected.
Jolene turned into the doorway and smiled. âReady or not, pastor, here I come.â
Comments
Oh, this was a fun twist. I didn't expect a happy ending either. Sometimes they just happen, LOL.
Emory Ahlberg
2020-07-18 00:21:09 +0000 UTCI'm a little surprised, I didn't expect you to give such a dark original comic a happy ending! I've read just about all your stuff and you still surprise me!
Jessica Thence
2020-07-17 23:59:57 +0000 UTCOh, you know he makes her do her wifely duties on the regular!
Emory Ahlberg
2020-01-24 10:09:35 +0000 UTCI'm sure the pastor makes her atone every night LoL x
stacy C
2020-01-20 17:12:55 +0000 UTCThank you, Storm!
Emory Ahlberg
2020-01-18 18:54:17 +0000 UTCwooow amazing good
Stormfries
2020-01-18 13:44:36 +0000 UTCThanks so much, France. For a bit, I wasnât sure what would happen to Jolene. Would her new husband treat her poorly? Then I decided it was more interesting if she (to her horror, at first) found the experience of being a sober woman better than being an alcoholic man.
Emory Ahlberg
2020-01-17 19:44:57 +0000 UTCThanks, Jen! Figured Jolene actually deserved her redemption.
Emory Ahlberg
2020-01-17 19:42:42 +0000 UTCLOL - thatâs both wicked and sweet, Erica.
Emory Ahlberg
2020-01-17 19:41:44 +0000 UTCPregnant, Jolene will make a very pretty woman and she already has the sensitivity ... she seems very submissive to her husband. This short story has a lot of depth and possibility.
France Day
2020-01-17 15:17:53 +0000 UTCaww what a sweet ending
Jennifer
2020-01-17 08:10:32 +0000 UTCWe can say that she was forgiven by where he sinned !! đ
Erica Rost
2020-01-17 05:41:44 +0000 UTC
